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Authors Show Poor Educational Background

apple-256263__180I do quite a bit of editing for other authors. These authors write every genre. But I’m also finding that most have very poor educational backgrounds. They don’t know the basics of the English grammar.

Too often, I look at a piece I’m editing and shake my head. What was this author thinking? What they wrote is nearly gibberish. A second grader writes better English. Yes, these are the authors of our day. Again, shake my head.

Who writes and doesn’t know that you put a comma after, or before depending on location, a name when used as an address in dialogue? Most authors don’t. I had one argue with me. She said that she had never heard of doing that before. Not even in school? Nope. How about in the books you read? Well, she reads only those written by people with as little education as her. Again, shake my head.

Another author kept mixing past and present tense. As I tried to correct them, the author protested. Said I was messing with her voice. I pointed out the basic grammar rule. She called me a liar because she never heard that in school.

I was in a group and noticed a post by a fellow author. It was two examples of formatting. He asked which one was right. One was clearly wrong as it broke most rules. Some paragraphs were indented and some were not. Dialogue had it’s narrative that was to be with it in a separate paragraph, including the dialogue tags. One author pointed out how that one was the correct one. When we pointed out the issues, she said that dialogue is not supposed to be in the same paragraph as what the characters say. What? I reminded her that dialogue is what the characters say. She began screaming at me (virtually) and said I was wrong. Her publisher had told her that what characters say should always be in paragraphs by themselves. Then I was told off and reported for attacking her. Yep, I have no idea what I’m talking about.

One author continually wrote either sentence fragments or run on sentence. I pointed them out. She said what are those, she had never heard of them. I explained. Then she said, “How do I fix them?” Really? And you’re a writer? I don’t think so.

If you don’t know the basic grammar rules, please don’t try to write a book. Learn them. Learn how to use them in your writing. I don’t want to discourage anyone, but then don’t argue with anyone what what is obvious you know nothing about.

Not Enough Time in the Day to Write

time-94990__180There is just not enough time in the day to write everything that wants to pour out of me. I want to just sit and type away, but there is such a thing as life. Gets in the way too much.

I could get up earlier, but I get up pretty early as it is. Five o’clock the alarm goes off for me to get ready for work. I tried getting up earlier, but that is hard on just six hours sleep. Plus, I have discovered the hard way that when I start writing and have to stop to leave for work, I get very upset and frustrated. I want to keep writing. So to keep my attitude in check, it is probably wise that I don’t write before I go to work.

During the day, I actually can get time to write, but because I’m at work that is not too dedicated. I eat my desk so I can write, but of course I’m at my desk which means if someone needs something, I take care of it. I can’t just focus on my writing.

When I get home….it’s a crap shoot if I can write or not. As I write this, it is basketball season. My husband is a coach, and my son is on varsity. There are practices and games. I go to half, the home games, and have to pick people up. I try to get dinner on the table when I can and look around at a house that seems never to be picked up. I want to write but am way too tired. I try to get that writing it at least an hour a day and a little more on the weekend.

I need more time! I need the sun to stand still and everyone to leave me to write! Do you think I’ll get it? Do you think I’ll get more time in the day to write? Nope, me either.


Exploring the Setting and Themes of Dickens and Doerr

Characters in a story do not talk and move about in a blank world with no color and no objects. They have to conduct their story in some type of setting. Their world helps direct the story and bring the climax to fruition. The setting can be as varied as the characters and support their actions and the underlying theme of the story. In nearly sister stories, A Tale of Two Cities and All the Light We Cannot See, the settings are vital for the plot, character development, and themes to develop.

A major connection between the books is the fact that a large section of their settings are in war torn France. Dickens’ goes between London and Paris as he weaves A Tale of Two Cities about the lives torn apart by the French Revolution. Doerr takes All the Light We Cannot See and sets it in Germany and France during World War II. Both authors used France during very bloody times and set their stories of hope and fear in the middle of it. All the characters strive to survive and reunite with loved ones during times that are dangerous and explosive. The atmosphere is highly charged with multiple conflicts abounding.

Both authors chose settings and time periods that did not require extensive world building. They both took real places and real events to help establish the rules of the world. There was no need to create societal rules, scientific rules, or ethnic rules. These were laid out in the history books and followed by the authors. This left them to focus on creating the characters and the conflict that was placed in these settings. Yet they took their own unique approaches.

Dickens allows the characters to conduct their development and display in a peaceful setting. While France was in revolt, Great Britain was at peace. Nearly half the book is set in a peaceful setting with the conflict in the wings, moving about as it prepared to suck them into intense conflict. He takes the time to describe a dinner, “of a very modest quality…so well cooked and so well served, and so neat…, half English and half French, that nothing could be better” (Dickens, 75). Doerr, on the other hand has both locations the characters play out full of conflict and strife. France is being invaded and occupied with executions and arrests as well as curfews and censorship. Citizens flee and “a child screeches. A man with panic in his voice demands the crowd to make way. A woman nearby moans…” (Doerr, 78). Germany is also full of arrests and censorship as the people are pulled along into a war as the enemy. There is conflict and tension in both settings. The characters are never allowed a place to rest and find peace. They are always in the midst of the conflict. There is continual tension permeating the pages.

Dickens’ limits his worlds where the characters move about. They move between three primary locations in London. In France, most scenes are set in tense Paris with a small detour outside the city. Even within the city, he keeps the characters in close quarters either in the wine shop, in the prison, or right outside the prison. Very little is allowed outside those boundaries. That allows him to use familiar rules for his world. He does not need to stretch to allow certain moves by the characters. Everything is set in an orderly manner. Doerr does not limit his characters. They move about all over the two countries. Various cities and locations are seen on the pages as “in three months…has traveled to Berlin and Stuttgart” one character travels (Doerr, 234). The worlds are changing for Doerr’s characters. He has to make sure each setting is right for that scene. The blind girl’s worlds are slightly more restrictive to the German boy’s as she counts “every day she has been shut up…One hundred and twenty. One hundred and twenty one” (Doerr, 166), but they are more detailed. The author shows Marie-Laure moving about the “cellar in her stocking feet. Here’s a rolled rug…Antique lamp. Madame Manec’s canning supplies” (Doerr, 206). Doerr goes into extreme detail in her world as the reader has to see it through her heightened senses. Even when the reader is observing from a distance, the detail is given. Doerr’s worlds are adapted to appeal to the reader’s senses. Dickens’ worlds are used more as a backdrop to guide the characters.

Various themes run through the stories assisting the reader in seeing how “it relates to reality and life in general” (Carpenter). Both stories touch on the destruction of war and how it can pull families apart. Dickens shows family members pulled from their loved ones and thrown into prison and then usually on to have their head removed. It threatens to tear Lucy and Charles apart and send her father’s mind back into the darkness where they had pulled it from. He uses the setting to show how dark the revolution compared to the peaceful meal in Britain: “…with dripping blood…all their wicked atmosphere seemed gore and fire. The eye could not detect one creature in the group free from the smear of blood” (Dickens, 203). Doerr has war separate Werner from his sister and having it cause Marie-Laure to flew from her home with her father. They see death and lose many who are near to them. Death is always near by due to the war machine Hitler had running over Europe. It buries them: “Maybe they are buried too deep….The rations are long gone, the canteens are empty, and the sludge in the bottom of the bucket…is undrinkable” (Doerr, 379).

Throughout most of Dickens’ book, he has the theme boiling in the background. The characters are not always in the midst of the conflict. The threat is there but only if they reach out for it. Once Charles Darnay does, the turmoil quickly engulfs them which leads to the tense climax near the very end of the book. Doerr allows only a small window of time before the characters are lost in the war theme. It consumes them and drives every decision they make. Dickens has the theme in the shadows most of the time. Doerr has it front and center.

Dickens audience when he published the book were British subjects mainly living in London. Having so much of the story set in London helped the reader to connect to the characters. He used the setting as the character connection and bring sympathy for them when the French, who were commonly at odds with the British, were threatening to ruin the peace they had obtained in London. It helped support his theme of the destruction of war. This is done immediately on the first page when he connects the reader by pointing out that “there was a king…and a queen…on the throne of England…there was a king…and a queen…on the throne of France” (Dickens, 1). Doerr’s technique of having the setting a pivotal force increases the intensity of the story. War is everywhere, even in the peaceful coastal town where Marie-Laure and her father seek sanctuary. The setting and the atmosphere around them is destruction with hope pushing them forward. Even within the place she seeks safety, her finds her “heart scrambling to deliver oxygenated blood, the mind scrambling to unravel the situation” (Doerr, 312).

Both authors use the setting to support the theme but in unique ways. Dickens has it lurking in the shadows ready to pounce to rush the climax forward. Doerr has the theme ever present and driving everything in the story. All actions and decisions are based on the destruction of war. Dickens makes it appear more tertiary until he needs it to wrap it all up. So similar yet so different. Each author takes a unique approach with the same literary elements to create different reactions to their stories and masterpieces to stand on their own.



Works Cited

Carpenter, Courtney. “Exploring Theme – A Key Component to Successful Writing”. Writer’s Digest. 30 April, 2012. Web. 6 February, 2016.

Dickens, Charles. A Tale of Two Cities. New York: Dover Publications, Inc., 1999. Print

Doerr, Anthony. All the Light We Cannot See. New York: Scribner, 2014. Print.




Familiar Settings Allows Readers to Connect with Characters

window-1050098__180Karen Russell’s “St. Lucy’s Home for Girls Raised by Wolves” really got my attention. I can’t say that it was the setting that drew me in. I think it was the unique concept of the story itself. But the setting was intriguing. It was set in our world a few years back but crossed over into a mythical world that we assume doesn’t exist. In the story, it does. Werewolves exist just in the woods, yet they find a home in ours. I couldn’t resist this story over the others I read in my assignments. It gave me a hint of real world mingled with the myth.

The setting is familiar to me as a reader. Instead of putting me into a world where the furniture is alien to me as well as the buildings and people, everything the writer describes I have or have been around, aside from an actual werewolf. While I enjoy watching science fiction movies, I don’t like to read them as much because everything is too alien to me. In Ms. Russell’s story, I am comfortable in the setting. I can focus on the characters and their development and not worry about understanding the setting.

I tend to write scenes that are more contemporary because of the familiarity. Yes, I have dipped my fingers into fantasy, but I still draw upon settings that are nearly commonplace in that genre so that my readers won’t have to feel alien when they read them. I want them to feel at home in the settings. I also need to feel at home and tend to stay with familiar things to me.

As a reader, I think we take the setting for granted too often. But when you look at the piece as a writer, you look at it differently. You evaluate it differently. I look at Russell’s work and can see how the author put the setting in a way that I could focus on the characters who were extremely unique. The setting was not detailed in her story. A bedroom was a bedroom. Look at how the author’s first paragraph of the story:

At first, our pack was all hair and snarl and floor-thumping joy. We forgot the barked cautions of our mothers and fathers, all the promises we’d made to be civilized and ladylike, couth and kempt. We tore through the austere rooms, overturning dresser drawers, pawing through the neat piles of the Stage 3 girls’ starched underwear, smashing lightbulbs with our bare fists. Things felt less foreign in the dark. The dim bedroom was windowless and odourless. We remedied this by spraying exuberant yellow streams all over the bunks. We jumped from bunk to bunk, spraying. We nosed each other midair, our bodies buckling in kinetic laughter. The nuns watched us from the corner of the bedroom, their tiny faces pinched with displeasure.

From this, I see how the familiar setting means less description on where they are is needed. I don’t have to focus on a familiar dormitory room would look like especially run by nuns. That is familiar to me through other pieces of literature, film, and what I have seen in real life. But the girls are new to me. This leaves the author more time to focus on describing their actions so I can actually see them and begin to relate to them.

I had a friend tell me that one of my stories lacked description. She wanted me to spend paragraph after paragraph describing this living room they were in. I wanted to focus on the people and events. I see from this that the little description I had was enough. It allowed the reader to finish filling it in while focusing on the parts that are not as familiar and giving the characters time to shine. Venturing into other settings that are much more unfamiliar to the reader means more description is needed.


Works Cited:
Russell, Karen. “St. Lucy’s Home for Girls Raised by Wolves”. cisyeo. Web. 27 January 2016.

Market Your Book by Creating Character Connections

connect-20333__180A great way to market your book is to get people to connect to your readers. Ones that have read your work will be wanting more. Ones that haven’t will be highly curious. That’s what marketing is all about.


One very successful self-publishing writer found other people who had the name of her characters and connected with them on social media. These people found it cool that their names would be in books.

Another young author went shopping and tried on clothes her character would have worn. Pics were taken and then posted on social media.

One author had her character taking pictures and posting them online with comments that only the character would have said.

Likable Characters

When there is a likable character, people want to get to know them better. These are great ones to connect with your readers and expand your readership. But….

the other side of the coin can be even more fun.

Evil Characters

I tend to love to get closer to evil characters. They have such depth and aren’t nearly as totally evil as you might think. One author had a very interesting character who we pegged as bad. But a short novella about him had us seeing him in a different light. He was the one I wanted to get to know better.

Example of Using Dialect in Writing

(This is an assignment I had in my creative writing class. In it we discussed how dialogue can be used and the many different ways an author can use it to deliver their message. )


Jesmyn Ward’s “Cattle Haul” is a creative short story that brings the dialect of the characters into the narrative. Many authors reserve the dialect to be heard in the dialogue as the characters speak. Ward takes a different approach and writes the entire story in the local dialect of the author. One example is this piece from “Cattle Haul”:

Before Grandmama died and left the trailer to me, the faucets in the house started spitting out sand because the well was too shallow. I ain’t have no money to get the well re-dug, so I moved back in with my daddy. I cleaned her trailer every Sunday and I got a job as a janitor at Love’s gas station but I couldn’t never make enough for that well. When I asked about a loan, the bank teller looked at me like I was a nutra-rat. I was still trying to talk the well digger into taking payments.

Most times when an author writes in the local dialect, I tend to have to read it out loud to fully get the meaning. When I read this section, I can hear in my voice the Southern dialect I grew up with. Traditionally, the narrative is written with correct grammar and sentence structure. Here, Ward steps out of the mold and lets the narrative become the dialogue with the point of view being in first person.

Many people with less education speaks with run on sentences. The character’s narrative does here as well as he states, “I cleaned her trailer every Sunday and I got a job as a janitor at Love’s gas station but I couldn’t never make enough for that well.” Saying it out loud, I can hear the character actually saying the words. The writing style helps to bring the character to life and allows me to feel as though the character is speaking right to me.


Works Cited:


Ward, Jesmyn. “Cattle Haul” A Public Space Issue No.4. Electric Literature. Web. 21 Jan. 2016.

Stockholm Syndrome

handcuffs-964522__180In my book, Trust Me, I have a kidnap victim fall in love with her kidnapper. Now it turns out he was really not a kidnapper though technically he did commit the act. But he was a good guy is what I’m getting g at. When she falls in love with him, she believes he has kidnapped her supposedly to save her life. Many would call this Stockholm Syndrome which is a very real thing and has played a major part in many people’s lives.

Officially named in 1973, the syndrome has become renown in the media and on film and in books. Stockholm syndrome is the connection between an abductor and the victim. Instead of despising the kidnapper and trying to escape, many victims become attached to the abductor and even fall in love with them at times. They ‘join’ the kidnapper and see themselves not as a victim anymore. The victim becomes the criminal and takes part in many of their illegal acts.

One of the most famous incidents involved the abduction of Patty Hearst. The heiress was taken one day as a victim but then was carrying a gun and participating in bank robberies later on. During her initial time with her kidnappers, she developed a bond with them that became stronger than that with her real family.

Another was more recent. Jessica Small was a young girl taken from her home. She became extremely obedient and docile to the point of doing whatever her captors said in order to survive. Her bond was not as real as most under the Stockholm Syndrome is classified, but she allowed it to develop to live and then later was rescued. Her bond did not carry long past the rescue.

This syndrome has now expanded beyond kidnappings and is being used wherever there is a relationship where one person is controlling another. A great article by Dr. Joseph M. Carver expands on this further.

My story, Trust Me, involves a kidnapping. The victim finds herself drawn to the man who took her, but the situation is unique. He isn’t cruel to her. He keeps telling her that he did it to save her life. Only then does she allow herself to fall completely for him. The rest of the story is her discovery on whether or not he can be trusted. A few potential readers have protested the kidnapping part but they haven’t read it yet to see that it is not really like the actual events that I’ve described above that have been labeled Stockholm syndrome. There is no brainwashing. It is a story of mystery and intrigue. Stockholm Syndrome is serious and not a romantic toy.


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